![]() ![]() The story began with a cool, adult feel to it, structured and the kind of story I could sink my teeth into. Even the worlds that the characters battle on, one minute they're in a room, then they're on a star, then the star is transparent, then they're in the sky in a space ship, then they've landed light years away (you know, because in space every destination is just around the corner), then they have no fuel then the lesbian princess, oh and what's with the Valley Girl sound of Xiange or Xange (however one spells that), it sounded okay at first but for a world eating, star inhaling super power her character is hardly believable, she sounds more like she needs 20% off at Macy's and a manicure, however it's possible that is the fault of the narrator more than the author. ![]() I get that this is a fantasy story, and I get that it requires a healthy dose of imagination but the way the writer strings the scenes together doesn't work for my logical brain, I need scene structure that explains how we got from this to that, not a world full of one then suddenly another with no clear discription of what this "another" is. By "this" and "that" I mean the way the story just jumps into the next scene with no clear structure and no clear understanding of what led the characters into that scene. What started as a pretty cool story with awesome word play, right up my alley, quickly descended into a fantastic mess of this then that. ![]()
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